Hyrule Adventures 2

OOC: This is to help Jarod with his spelling and grammar. As such, only he should post here. But feel free to read along and learn as well.

IC:
Amelia Aestas eyed the man before her. He was a mage, and that meant he had to have had a scholarly background. And yet, Rose had told him to come to her so that his grammar would be improved. She's lucky she's my friend, she thought. Turning her attention back to Azador, she said, "Okay, before I start going over the rules of spelling and grammar, let's first see where you need help. I want you to write a paragraph for me. It can be about anything. When you're done, give it to me, and I'll look it over, and then we'll go from there."

Azador took a pen and paper and began to write a small story.

The creation of a world:

A long time ago before the stars even shone. A goddes appeared she fellt all alone in this emptinies. And created a world full with living beings, it looked much like our world.
Goddes soon found out thas she couldn't control the beings, they killed eachothers and hated other races. The goddes didn't know what to do, she wiped two celestial tears.
Which fellt on the world one landed in a massive volcano the other one fellt on a forest which covered a continent. The earth merged whith the holy tears and formed. Two new entities. The entities tried to calm the goddes. She didn't want to see this war anymore, and she put herself in sleep.. She wanted that the two entities to watch over the world..And if the world where to come in this chaos again she would awaken and destroy her creation.

Azador stopped writing.. And gave the paper to Amelia.
He quikly sat down again to hear her reaction

OOC: this is the intro of a story I'm writing..