The Desert Colossus

Here is a story that my friend e-mailed me. It's a good story, very beautiful. I don't know how to describe it otherwise, so enjoy!

   As I was walking
   down life's highway
   many years ago

   I came upon a
   sign that read

   Heaven's Grocery Store.

   When I got a
   little closer

   the doors swung
   open wide

   And when I came
   to myself

   I was standing
   inside.

   I saw a host of
   angels.

   They were
   standing everywhere

   One handed me a
   basket

   and said "My
   child shop with care."

   Everything a
   human needed

   was in that
   grocery store

   And what you
   could not carry

   you could come
   back for more

   First I got some
   Patience.

   Love was in that
   same row.

   Further down was
   Understanding,

   you need that
   everywhere you go.

   I got a box or
   two of Wisdom

   and Faith a bag
   or two.

   And Charity of
   course

   I would need some
   of that too.

   I couldn't miss
   the Holy Ghost

   It was all over
   the place.

   And then some
   Strength

   and Courage to
   help me run this race.

   My basket was
   getting full

   but I remembered
   I needed Grace,

   And then I chose
   Salvation for

   Salvation was for
   free

   I tried to get
   enough of that to do

   for you and me.

   Then I started to
   the counter

   to pay my grocery
   bill,

   For I thought I
   had everything

   to do the Masters
   will.

   As I went up the
   aisle

   I saw Prayer and
   put that in,

   For I knew when I
   stepped outside

   I would run into
   sin.

   Peace and Joy
   were plentiful,

   the last things
   on the shelf.

   Song and Praise
   were hanging near

   so I just helped
   myself.

   Then I said to
   the angel

   "Now how much do
   I owe?"

   He smiled and
   said

   "Just take them
   everywhere you go."

   Again I asked
   "Really now,

   How much do I
   owe?"

   "My child" he
   said, "God paid your bill

   a long long time
   ago."

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meh, it was ok i think it was dramaticized by the fact that im listening to classicial right now..

There is not much for me to say about it other than it was a really nice poem.

How nice ^^. I like the ending. I think the rhythm is a little bit varying, but that effect might be amplified by the way it's presented here on the forums (looks a little untidy).

Anyway, if your friend wrote it, give him/her some praise for us :D.

Very nice. I enjoy that, being a religious girl. I would suggest a few rewrites to take out some of the oddities. Same rhymes, too much repetition, etc. But a very nice message all the same.

I'll tell you right now that I have no clue who wrote it. ;) But thanks!!

That is  great.

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Well I am not a fan of poetry but still a very elegant and nicely written poem. Two thumbs up.

Being "a man of faith", that made my day :D