THE LAND OF TARETON
BOOK ONE : THE CHOSEN ONES
PREFACE
Gramma said," The war for Tareton had just begun a few months ago after Koton held an uprising agianst the king, the kingdom was never the same. Some say he is dead, some say he's hiding from the king."
" Nobody knows.",said Whutron.
" Thats right Whutron.", said Gramma.
" OH!," exclaimed Gramma," It's your bedtime Whutron."
" Already.", replied Whutron.
That night Whutron thought about the uprising to the king, who was Koton, why he led it,and how it left a scar on Tareton's history.After that he had fallen asleep with those questions in his head.The next morning Whutron asked," Who was Koton and why did he lead an uprise against the king."
" He said that the king didn't deserve a kingdom.",said his mom.
" Then who was he.",replied Whutron.
Nobody said anything for a moment and then his mom said," He was a mad man with his quest for the philosopher's stone to top it off."
" What is the philosopher's stone.", said Whutron with a quizzical emotion on his face.
Gramma said wisely," Tis the most powerfull stone in the world.It can make metals like lead to gold or silver, or grant long life or even... immortality.This stone is powerfull but also of lore and legend."
" Whutron did you remember to feed the ravens.",stated his mom.
" Yes mom," groaned Whutron.With that Whutron went to go get some more food for his raven when he noticed that the king's messenger was coming to his house. Whutron ran back to the house.Then the he opened the door and yelled,"The king's messenger is coming!"
Then the messenger came to the house and said in a booming voice,"Is this the Gotfin family."
" Yes," I grunted.
" I have some very sad news about Oliver Gotfin,"he stated.
" He died while we were searching for Koton," he continued.
" His horse bucked while a thunder storm and he fell off his horse while we were going through the mountain pass," sadly said the messenger.
When the news reached the village there was not a dry eye in sight. For the next week nobody talked very much through out the village.The next family reunion was a sad one because of the loss of a very loved one.So at that reunion Whutron made a vow to find and kill Koton.
Chapter One
After the reunion Whutron in a few days will start to train to be squire than a knight so he can kill Koton for all the damage he has done to this kingdom. With this going around Whutron's mind while he did his chores. When he went into the village people treated him better than usual because of a loss so great.When Huber came toward Whutron, Huber started talking to me he said,"I would be sad too if it were to my father to be killed during the search for Koton,"Huber continued,"It's not your fault that the horse bucked."
"So," I said trying to maintain a sturdy voice.
"Things like that happen, sometimes more than others," Huber said sadly.By the time we reached dead willow's creek we were out of breath.We took a rest down by the dead willow."Wanna go swimming," asked Huber.
"Why," I continued," The water is freezing,and it is almost winter."
"So,"Huber debated.
"What if we drowned and nobody noticed,"I debated.
"Good point," said Huber
"Wanna go back to the village,"I said rather calmly.
"Sure,"said Huber.
On the way back to the village I had noticed something, the Huber's dad had just arrived from the town of Turay for the lessons."Where is Whutron Gotfin," he declared.
"It is I Whutron Gotfin," I said excitingly.
"It is time to train you to become a squire,"He said in a commanding voice.
That night I thought about starting my training tommorow, and it might affect my life.I also thought about the search and how it will affect the kingdom if they find Koton. The next morning I started my training.It was a rough first day.If you are asking how it went this is how.
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We started off with sword play."Come on Whutron I know you can do better than that,"yelled Huber's dad.
" I'm trying my best,"I said.
" Well your best is not good enough,"he said.
" This is my first time," I stated.
We kept practicing for hours until supper.Then we heard the bell gonging from the the Lord's palace telling us it was time for supper. When we got there there was our closest freinds and family. For the Dinner we had roast duck, chicken, turkey, boiled broccili, salad, fruit, and much more. That night we stuffed ourselves 'till we had to take our belts off.
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The next day was Sunday. We had the morning sermon until noon. After that Huber's dad took me to train again. This time it wasn't Hand to Hand weapons but archery, and you know what that means. Yep thats right bows and arrows.Huber's dad tought me how to set up an archery target. He told me to take twelve steps from the target and told me to do this. Hold the leather on the bow. Then load the arrow so that the notch on the butt of the arrow has the string in it.
Next, pull the arrow back so the bow bends. Then release the arrow so the arrow flies torward the target. So I tried it, and you know what.... Well lets just say i'm not exactly the best shot in the world. But as you know that was my first time.
Huber's dad told me to try again. So I tried again. I came closer to hitting the target. Close but no hit. So we went back to hand to hand weapons. I did better this time but I still had lost. So Huber's dad went into the weapon house and got a spear.
" This is a spear." He stated.
He went back in and took something new out of the weapons house. It looked like a bow or was it I couldn't tell.
" Whutron do you know what this is." He asked.
" No I don't." I had replied.
He told me. " This is a cross bow."
" What is a cross bow?" I said with a puzzled face.
" It is bow that a trigger and a wooden stock, and it is much easier to handle unlike a regular bow.'' explained Huber's dad.
Chapter Two
In a little faiery village named Pabospet, Miles away from Whutron we have a little fairy learning magic. She is struggling in magic like Whutron in weaponry. Right now Grace can only do simple elemental magic like start a fire with doing anything. On her way back from collecting berries for the village she noticed something was wrong. Very wrong. She looked at the berries but that wasn't it. She looked at the trees but that wasn't it either. When she got back to the village every tree, family, and house was destroyed. She looked for survivers and she found the entire village folk in the woods surrounding. All of the healers were there trying there best to heal the young and the old. Turns out Koton had came through with an army of demons. Knowing some of Tareton's history Grace starts thinking to her self. " If the name Koton has been mentioned several time through out Tareton history every 150 years and he is gone the year following the 150th year that means he'll be gone soon. He is always defeated by a group. A Knight, a Rouge, a Faiery, and an Elf." and thats all she could remember.
Grace used her magic to help start the fire for the elders and everyone else. She asked the village elders to tell her all that they know about and how to destroy Koton. They said," Koton is an evil wizard who lurks at the border of Tareton, and he has a portal to the under world. He is also to have said that he gets more powor each time he escapes the Seal of Light. Each person needs a special weapon, but we don't know what the weapons are. Go ask the village black smith.
" Bitly, BITLY, where are you?" Grace yelled.
" I'm over here by the ash tree" Bitly said loudly. Grace ran over to the ash tree.
Bitly announced to every one " This here faiery, Grace is a choosen one."
Someone went " How can you tell!!"
"If you look at the records of the faiery chosen one she is an elemental faiery who has blue eyes, brown hair, and is a girl. Now look at Grace. Elemental, blue eyes, brown hair, and a girl." Bitly said promtly." And don't forget the mark."
" HOW DID YOU KNOW ABOUT MY BIRTHMARK!!!!!" Grace yelled.
" I was there when you where born. Your family and I didn't want to tell you until you were older but since Koton is on the prowl again we had to tell you." Bitly explained.
" So the time has come to start training you and your magic to higher levels."
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The next morning Grace went to help rebuild the village. The only part left was the library. She wanted to see if there was a record of her necklace out of curiosity. She only found a record. It said that her necklace had a magic spell on it that held her powers back. She learned that the only way to get the necklace is to get the person who put on, take it off. That night she asked who put the necklace on her neck.
"I did"
" Who was that" Grace yelled.
" Me" said the mysterious voice.
" Mom, who is that" I said while trying not to go into a nervous break down.
" It is me, Bitly" Bitly said in his booming voice.
Reply if you like it
Fan Works....I'll read it after I move it.
I'm double posting, only because my last post was stating that I moved the topic. I only saw a few problems.
- grammatical issues, nothing to major
- Philosophor's stone is copyrighted by J.K Rowling
no the philosiper stone is just a world wide myth like the fountain of youth or atlantis
gramical errors is a definet. the only reason is because i have a program that has no spell check
Ok granted, I just did my homework on that subject. But maybe you could try something less......cliche.
Ok. I'll have to do that some time and copy the new versoin
Quote from: weetle on May 07, 2007, 02:46:56 PM
gramical errors is a definet. the only reason is because i have a program that has no spell check
You should still look through the story yourself. Spell Check doesn't catch everything.
good idea. but im no good at grammar. im only in 6th grade
You're not very good at reading rules either, there was another double post...
also, being in sixth grade is no excuse, violinist is nine and she's amazing.
sorry. new to the place.
One, Shikaboose is right. Being is 6th grade is no excuse. You should be learning about grammar. If a nine year old can use proper grammar all the time, then so should you (as well as some of our older members).
Also, being new to the place is not a good excuse for breaking the rules. When I joined, the first thing I looked for were the rules.
Not to mention you have been reprimanded every time you broke the rules, and I have TOLD you to go look at the rules and where you could find them.
where are the rules
*sigh* go to the announcements board. You're lucky you don't have any warnings, they have been extremely easy on you...
is Topic: How 'bout some rules? it
Yes, that would be it 8)as if the title didn't give it away...
Ok. Just read it
We're getting off topic.
I'll allow his double post on the grounds that I made a double post as well, he might not have been aware of why I made the double post.
Weetle, assuming that you have read the rules, any more offenses from here on out are warnings.
Ok.
If you had read the rules, you would have known one word posts aren't allowed. 8)Go read them.
Ok. Re-read. Now i'm going to book mark the place
Okay, good. Hopefully we won't have to discuss this any more.
Ok. So how did you like it. Excelent, good, so-so, poor, or junk.
You read the rules, so now, you get a warning for one word posting according to Gamefreak.
What happened about my story. We are talking about the rules. So do you like it or not.
It sounds like a poor attempt at a J.K. Rowling-level story. Some of the stuff there jsut sounds way to much like Rowling's work. The scar and the Philosopher's Stone.
I also agree that just because you're in 6th grade doesn't give you an excuse. I joined a year ago in 6th grade and had the same grammar abilities I do now, with some (minor) improvements. The only times I make a grammar mistake is due to my incredibly fast typing or because the word I'm using is very complicated. The second one rarely happens, though.
No. Their is just the philosipher's stone. But I have read J.K. Rowling's work. So did you like it or not. That is my question. :-\
Although you have a story working its way to completion, it still is too much of a medieval Harry Potter for me to pay alot of attention to.
Ok. I'm over at a freinds house right now so I can't work on it.
The next day Grace went to the forest. Yet, to only find herbs and berries. Witch was flourishing, unlike the crops witch were burned when Koton attacked. There were also mushrooms that also were flourishing in the shade created by the giant ash woods. But one problem is that this forest is very dense.
Then Grace heard some one coming. She panicked. The first branch she saw she jumped at it. She missed. Grace went for a branch that was lower. This branch she got a hold of.
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This is part of my story
It's....very bland. No depth...everything is stated as matter-of-fact with no description or anything to make it interesting or unique. Do you know what flourish means?
Doesn't flourish mean to thrive in a community. or there is alot and is doing well.