My story

[Mr. bubbles]

   The next day Grace went to the forest. Yet, to only find herbs and berries. Witch was flourishing, unlike the crops witch were burned when Koton attacked. There were also mushrooms that also were flourishing in the shade created by the giant ash woods. But one problem is that this forest is very dense.
Then Grace heard some one coming. She panicked. The first branch she saw she jumped at it. She missed. Grace went for a branch that was lower. This branch she got a hold of.




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This is part of my story    

[DW]

It's....very bland. No depth...everything is stated as matter-of-fact with no description or anything to make it interesting or unique. Do you know what flourish means?

[Mr. bubbles]

Doesn't flourish mean to thrive in a community. or there is alot and is doing well.