Legend of Zelda: The Lion’s Prey (R)

[Archangel M]

Here it is my first Zelda fan fic. ;D My friend thought the plot was very intresting and encoraged me to write it. This is just the prolouge the first chapter will be posted by the Saturday. Hope you will enjoy it. Nice to meet all of you. ;D
Warning! This is a fairly violent fan fic. There are a few brutal parts. Read only if your mature enough.  

Legend of Zelda: The Lion's Prey
By Archangel M

Prologue
   A few years have past since the "legend" of a hero of time and his battle of a great evil begun. Since it was a war fought through time, everyone (except those few who know) believe it is just a tale to entertain and marvel people. So the "hero of time" is but a myth and yet, he walks among them as an everyday commoner. The hero is Link. The "fairy boy" who helped the sages in defeating Ganondorf and saving Hyrule has moved on with his life. Link having reached maturity a few years ago, realized that he and Zelda could never be together: he was a peasant and she was a princess. The two decided to just stay as were friends but soon Link found a new love in his life; the love for a ranch girl named Malon. In just one year Malons' father agreed that Link could marry her and they've been together ever since.   

           Not only had Link and Zelda changed but so too, did the rest of Hyrule. Under the Kings' protection and his laws, the other races have prospered well and a  few believe they have entered a golden age. However the kingdom will soon face trouble when a new race appears. The new race are not a foul daemons or creatures but simply humans. In sudden turn of events Hyrule will soon find itself at war, dragging with them Link and Malon. As the army marches to Hyrule gates, as the world that Link once is destroyed right before his eyes, there is but one truth Link must admit: that he must yet again take up his sword and kill again in order to do good.

[MagmarFire]

Yeah, it does sound pretty interesting! I'd like to see what more you can come up with! :D

Oh, and welcome to TDC forums, buddy! :)

[Hi no Seijin]

The plot is interesting.  A few grammatical mistakes, but they're easily fixed.  I'd definitely say you would earn a spot on Tal'Kipach Risthan.

[Archangel M]

Hello everyone again. It's me ;D I have brought you an early update! This chapter may be a bit confusing but once I post Chapter 2 you will understand :P

Chapter 1: Death and power

   The sky was black from volcanoes from Death Mountain and where Hyrule Castle once stood. The air was almost toxic. But it wasn't hot but instead an eerie chill. The once beautiful city of Hyrule Town was abolished and abandoned long ago. Buildings had collapsed and no life existed, except those of the Redeads. In this chaotic hell that had plagued Hyrule two Hyrulians stood between one man's greed and the way to destroy this future. Their names are Link and Zelda.

   On the very ground were Ganondorf had built his menacing tower, it now lied in ruins. The King of Evil too had gone with it. However Ganondorf was not dead, and in a last act of desperation used his triforce piece to kill Zelda and Link. Although Ganondorf was tough before he was more powerful now. He had surrendered his body to become a daemon. With a Minotaur appearance, long and daunting wings, huge fist and above all a freighting skull face. His piercing yellow eyes, his mighty axe and iron shield, he looked like the Devil deity. Trapped within a ring of fire, Link and Zelda were in a fight of his life.

   Ganon was viciously swigging his immense axe at Link. Link had already be hurt from a previous blow to his right arm. Link had only his Master Sword to deflect the blows of the axe. If he let his guard down for even a breath he would no longer need a head to breathe.
"Die!" Ganon shouted as he flung his axe against the Master Sword. The clash of steel followed and the blades were locked in.
" Damn it! I can hold on like this forever!" Link thought as he mustered all of the strength he had to hold the daemon back. Suddenly Ganon quickly withdrew his axe and threw his shield to his left. Zelda had tried to spear Ganon from behind but Ganon reflexes stopped it.  
"You dirty little bitch,... I like that in a women." He said grinning his mouth. "I'm will enjoy having you be my "little" servant. Having to obey me and of course arouse me." He began to laugh at loud.  
" I'd rather die then serve under your ass!" she yelled back and quickly charged him. However she wasn't quick enough and Ganon threw his shield out her, knocking her to the ground.
"Zelda!!!" Link cried out and charged at Ganon, but like Zelda Ganon punched Link in his stomach. Knocking the wind out of him. He quickly fell to the ground, utterly helpless at this point.
"You two don't know when to quit do you? Alright princess since insisted you would rather die, I'll kill you first and then I'll kill your "hero" " He said in a sinister voice.

Suddenly Ganon cried out in pain and fell to his knees. He drooped his axe and shield next to him.  Zelda notice that in his back was a Light arrow.
"Maybe you should've killed me while I was down, instead of chasing women like a coward." Link said a brief smile appeared on his face.
"You bastard!"
Link ran up on to the top of Ganon's head and thrusted the sword straight into his head. Zelda quickly began summoning all of the sages to kill Ganon forever. Link had jumped off Ganon's head and cut off Ganon right hand to obtain the Triforce of Power.  Weak and dying, Ganon picked up his axe with left hand.
"Link behind you!!!" She shouted.
Link turned and suddenly felt an immense pain all over his stomach. He quickly looked down to see that his legs and lower stomach had been cut clear off. Blood was gushing out of him. He began to blackout and all he kept hearing was Zelda saying "Link!...Link!...Link!".  

[Hi no Seijin]

 :o

That wasn't confusing, that was dark and quite gory at the end.  Asides from some spelling mistakes and grammatical errors (again, easily fixed), it's still rather good.  However, you may want to go back to your first post and modify the subject line so you can warn people that it's a bit violent.  Change it to "Legend of Zelda:  The Lion's Prey--Rated R" or something like that.

[Archangel M]

Sorry about the grammar mistakes. :'( I sometimes get carried away with my sotry and begin to wonder off. :) But I'll try my best to stop. Next chapter should be up between Thursday or Friday.