adventures of a ritos daughter

[TP Zelda]

Lmao all this arguing is fun!!  

...But, yes, you need to do a little better. Sorry Medli2. XD

[a-girl-101]

i wish you guys would have let her finish the story. shes my friend and she decided to delete her account.

[Hi no Seijin]

Hey, I didn't say she couldn't finish her story; I was putting forth constructive criticism, and if she can't take that, then she's never going to become a good writer.

[a-girl-101]

she is easily angered. its not her fault though

[DW]

It is her fault if she can't take criticism. You don't see J.K. Rowling or Stephen King blowing up on camera.

And we didn't tell her she couldn't write anymore.

[a-girl-101]

well i have read all of her story and the beggining is very important but yet she though maybe if she put it in the story place youde say that when her charachters came in.

[DW]

...I didn't understand that sentence...What do you mean...?

[TP Zelda]

Dude, I'm not holding anythin against her. But, I think she's pretty good!!

I take what I said back before!! lol

[a-girl-101]

huh? why do you all of a sudden like it?

[Hi no Seijin]

I believe that counts as spam.  Besides, you shouldn't rely solely on emoticons and punctuation marks to communicate with us; I can't read minds, and even if I could I doubt I could do it from a distance.

[a-girl-101]

a ? or   means Huh. how is that spam? happy now i changed it

[Hi no Seijin]

Um, one word posts are still spam.

[a-girl-101]

I'm familiar with the concept of the gameplay in TWW.  However, when writing a fanfic about it, you don't have to take all of the mechanics literally (i.e., Link using the Command Melody); the writing comes off as unrealistic.  If your goal is to poke fun at the game, then such literal translations from game to paper is okay; however, this doesn't seem to be what you're going for, and Medli thanking Link for taking over her brain is just too far out there for such a seemingly serious story.

And what did you do?  Read my points one by one and posted a reply to each one?  If you're double posting to update the story, that's fine, but any other time you should use the modify button.

she tells me(medli96 (im her friend in person)) she said she was thanking him beacaue he got her out of a jail cell


oh and i changed it again

and this is totally off topic

[TP Zelda]

huh? why do you all of a sudden like it?

I liked it when I read it. >.> It's just it needs a grammar check.  

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