My brothers fan fic

[RaphaelTMNT]

This is a fan fic my brother wrote.


Super Allstars Advance
Chapter 1
Meeting of crossed over characters
Mario: "Hello Luigi, are you training for the next smash tournament?"
Luigi: "Nope, I'm training for the world tournament, you know the tournament that most skilled and talented fighters go to."
Mario:" well I have to show up at the smash tournament ,so I guess that means were going our separate ways."
Luigi: "I guess so , but lets just enjoy our time hear in the mushroom kingdom before we take off.
Mario: "what's that in the sky Luigi?"
Luigi: ''it looks like a portal to me."
Mario: ''no , i mean something is falling right in our direction.
Waluigi: "Waaah, greetings Mario , it is I, the greatest and the most charming of them all, Waluigi."
Luigi: ''I don't know about charming, but me and mario are the greatest."
Waluigi: ''I have just come hear to inform you that the smash tournament has been canceled."
Mario: ''what, that would never happen in a million years."
Waluigi: ''well it did to day and the new tournament, is the world tournament. I plan on destroying the both of you there, so hears your tickets and don't forget to show up.
Mario: ''can you believe him, he just called us out."
Luigi: ''well I kind of knew that this was going to happen."
Mario: ''what do you mean?"
Luigi: ''when I got a letter in the mail saying that all tournaments would be combined into one world tournament , I figured it out from there."
Mario: ''well, I guess we will be fighting side by side."
Link: ''mario, mario."
Mario: ''Link what are you doing hear?"
Link: ''mario, princess peach has been captured."
Luigi: ''what about daisy."
Link: ''Her to, and they said that if you two don't show up, they will be captured for ever."
Mario: ''who captured them?"
Link: ''a group of ninja thieves called the foot."
Luigi: ''the foot, we heard about them in Brooklyn remember mario?"
Mario: ''Oh yeah, but I remember hearing about four mysterious figures stopping them, so the foot shouldn't be that much of a challenge."
Luigi: "your right , but we should get going so we can save our girls and show the foot what the mario bros are all about."
Link: ''this is the portal that will take us to earth, so lets jump in."
Newyork city sewer.
Michelangelo: ''what no battle nexus tournament, master splinter has really come to his senses."
Leonardo: ''let me see that letter you jug head. It says, "my sons I'm informing you all, and I wanted to let you know that there will be no battle nexus tournament. There will be a world tournament, I wish you all would attend, good luck and I will see you soon."
Raph: ''well I'm ready to kick some shell , how about you don."
Don: ''I'm ready if your ready Raph."
Leo: ''well lets get going, so we can sneak on a good ship."
Michalangelo: ''oh man , I was just going to start a comic hour."
Raph: ''to bad, were going."
The four turtles left the sewers in brown jackets as the headed over to the docks.
Leo: ''well that's our ship."
Mike: ''it looks like a jet, or one of those ships on star wars."
Don: ''would you look at this stuff."
Starwolf: ''what are your names?"
Leo: ''well I'm leonardo, that's Michelangelo, Donatello and Raph."
Starwolf: ''Panther told me you guys were young, but green, anyway I'm sure you'll get the job done.
Leo: ''of course we will, that's what we do."
"What is he talking about?" Donatello thought to himself.
Starwolf: ''Panther, we've got our fox killers." He radioed.
Starwolf: ''its time to take off boys."
Michalangelo: ''i'i captain."
Minutes pass by.
Bowser: ''where's starwolf, he was supposed to pick us up at the boat yard."
Ganondorf: ''maybe we should go our separate ways until we regroup at the tournament."
Bowser: ''you mean the world tournament."
Ganondorf: ''yes."
Bowser: ''well lets hit road."

[Hi no Seijin]

Interesting.  Mostly dialogue with very few sentences devoted to what's actually happening.  The only way you can tell what's going on is through the characters' lines; this leaves some room for a reader's imagination.  It's like he's writing a play.  Nice.

[Zelda Veteran]

Hope you dont mind, but I color coded took like ten minutes! :P Well, it seems interesting, but where are they? How did they get there? And when is this taking place? Details man, details! :)

[RaphaelTMNT]

He's working on more chapters, I'll help him to make it better.