Tensuke

Hero Link · October 17, 2006, 09:32:18 PM

Name: Tensuke Kundatsu
Family: Orphan and his Brother is dead.
Gender: Male
Age: 19
Height: 1, 78 Meter.
Personality: Cold hearted, Anti-social and ignores everybody. But deep in his heart, he is kind and friendly.
Hair: A little long Black Hair.
Eyes: Dark Brown.
Wears: Black Shirt, Red Cape, Black Gloves Grey Pants and a Silver Necklace with a symbol, that shows a Sword, a Heart and Angel Wings.
Weapons: A sword, but in Dark Mode, he has 2 swords.
Weapon Name: Soul Eater and Spirit Sword.
Powers: Fire and Dark magic.
Transform: Dark Angel.

History: In a little city, outside Hyrule, there lived people, with magic powers. Tensuke's only family, is his brother, Dusack. Tensuke's best friend, Ken Ykian, who was also an orphan, was teased by many, because he didn't have any magic powers. Tensuke was his only and best friend and they have been that, in 8 years. They told their dreams, future and they will always be friends. Tensuke, had mastered, Fire Magic and was very popular. Ken began to feel jealousy and wanted to have magic powers, like the others and Tensuke. Tensuke was now 19 and had left the others, to train his sword skills. The day Tensuke returned, all wanted to see, what he had learned. Tensuke's swordplay, was fast and strong and everybody admired him. Ken felt, that Tensuke, didn't cared about him anymore and his darkness, began to grow. Some days later, Tensuke waked up, to see his city in flames. All the places were dead bodies and Tensuke couldn't find his brother. He saw 2 men, fighting far outside and went to see it. Then he saw one of them felt, to the ground and the other laughed evilly. Tensuke saw, that the man, who felt to the ground, was his brother! And the other man was Ken. Tensuke asked why, he had done this. Ken didn't answer and went away, while laughing. Tensuke yelled why did you do this, so many times. Because what his best friend has done, his darkness grew. Full of Anger, Pain and Sorrow two dark angel wings, grew out of him. A light beam, hit Tensuke and his wings, were gone. The one, who did that, was his brother. Tensuke ran over to his brother and asked, are you okay and what he did. His brother sealed the darkness, in Tensuke's heart so the darkness, didn't consumed him. His brothers last words were, "I will always be with you." Dusack faded away and Tensuke was all alone. Tensuke took his brothers sword and went, on a search for Ken, to find out, why he did those evil things. On his travels, he learned to use dark magic and unleash his darkness, so he became stronger. While he is in Dark Mode, he gets an evil sword, called Soul Eater and fights with it and his brothers sword. Sometimes, people asked how are you and others things like that, but Tensuke ignored them. Because what Ken has done, he couldn't trust anybody. A night, a voice said: "It looks like, you need someone to talk with." Tensuke looked around and saw his brothers sword, was glowing. "Brother?" Tensuke asked. "Yes, its me. I told you, that I will always be with you." Tensuke grinned a little, so now he knew, that he is not alone. He named his brothers sword "Spirit Sword" and continued his journey, to find out, why Ken surrendered his heart, to the darkness.

Hmmm... My first one... You didnt like it? Crap...

Hi no Seijin · October 18, 2006, 10:05:03 AM

Let's see, you posted this at 12:30 am. You edited it at 6:30ish am. Let's see, I was at my friend's apartment playing D&D, so I was off of the computer. Then I was asleep the whole 6 o'clock hour; naturally, I was off of the computer (that, and I just spent the night at my friend's place). So I had no chance to take a look at it until now. Also, you posted at a time when most other members are sleeping. So they didn't really have a chance to see it yet. So don't just assume that no one likes it just because no one responded to it.

And it is good. It's full of grammatical errors, but that can be fixed.